Wow dude, this is amazing :D just some things i want to point out :)
This time i see that the intro comes directly, a thing you didn't do in the original version :/ i still like how you entered into the main theme with that filter automation and the pitch effect at the end.
After that, i think the change in 0:22 is too abrupt, mainly because the downlifter can't barely be heard...It could also be combined with a crash to create more tension, but this is just my opinion, i'm not as experienced as you :) (btw nice gritty bass, i love them when it comes to drumstep)
The uplift into the first drop is very well made, i liked it a lot, it's more original with that synthy uplift ending with a vocal :)
Talking about the drop, growls are super well designed, and the lead is amazing :3 but i still prefer the original lead, it had more power and colour... again, this is my opinion ;)
The percussion could have been much better with more high frequencies, as it's drumstep and not exactly DnB... but they are well placed and well mixed together ;)
The bridge after the drop is very cool, i love that vibrating bass complementing the lead as a side "pad"... also left-right panning was a good idea ;) keep that style because it sounds great ;)
Second build up is the same as the first one, but the drop is well transformed into the DnB rythm, well done too. Maybe you can try to design a reese bass and try to implement them with leads and stuff... that comes with experimentation :3
The 3rd drop sounds i-n-c-r-e-d-i-b-l-e, amazing job with that chord drop, the slide notes that come from a minor chord (?) to the main one is a creative addition :), you can still do the slide notes from the same chord to another one which sounds cool too.
Well that's it, i pointed pros and cons so you can see what to keep and fix, but don't do everything, cuz again, i'm not as experienced as you... well, in two words, good job!
Keep it up, you're doing great lately.
/InflameGD